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Thread: My Little Pony XI: "Mmph!"
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2011-06-22, 07:56 AM (ISO 8601)
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Re: My Little Pony XI: "Mmph!"
Funny one-shots. It only needs to be coloured to be 20% cooler.
Nonsense. Don't you know birthdays are good for your health? Each simultaneous one even multiplies the effect, giving you immortality if you hold enough birthdays at the same time.
The pink one said so. She seemed totally legit.
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2011-06-22, 08:03 AM (ISO 8601)
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2011-06-22, 08:08 AM (ISO 8601)
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2011-06-22, 08:21 AM (ISO 8601)
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SpoilerThanks for the grammar/spelling catches.
I kind of styled myself into a corner with her thoughts. I was trying to keep her nagging/jealous internal voice in italics (also flashbacks), which means that I need to keep her normal internal stuff in third person. I'll be sure to fix those parts.
Re: Overall - It's absolutely understandable if you don't know what to think yet. Chapter 3 is where a lot of the "so what" of this story happens while the first two are setting it up. Though, you have made me think of something that's got me a bit bothered. See the question below:
SpoilerWhew. Glad it seems logical/reasonable to somepony other than me.
Hmm, what if I made it so that she can raise the stars, but because her mind is still preoccupied with the meeting and waking up early she can't focus well enough to move them all at once? I'll see what I can do to hint at it more, maybe add something about "remembering to stay calm and focused" when she raises them in Chapter 1.
A question for both of you:
SpoilerAs it stands, there's a lot of time difference between the chapters (3-4 months between the first two, slated 8-9 months between two and three) which means we see Luna after she's had to deal with the events of the previous chapter for a while. Thus, the tone of each chapter should be different from the last one. I'm worried that changing the tone too much is going to be confusing for the readers. Has the shift been drastic for you, or have you even noticed a shift?
Oh right, Happy Birthday EsperDerek! I'd post a pony-related birthday picture, but the risk of discovery is a mite too high right now.
I can fully endorse the pink one's advice. She has brought me nothing but delicious party cake and joy. Or maybe insanity. I always get those two mixed up.Last edited by TheAmishPirate; 2011-06-22 at 08:49 AM.
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2011-06-22, 08:51 AM (ISO 8601)
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Happy birth/creation/finding day Esper! Have a party-related comic I just found.
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2011-06-22, 09:02 AM (ISO 8601)
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Oh my Celestia there's dozens of them now and they're all making me party! The streamers and party balloon are everywhere! I've played pin the tail on the donkey forty times in a row already!
There's been so many cakes and cupcakes and pies and other sweets stuffed down my throat I'm rolling around someone help me save me from all the Pinkies!
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2011-06-22, 09:04 AM (ISO 8601)
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The name is "tonberrian", even when it begins a sentence. It's magic, I ain't gotta 'splain why.
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2011-06-22, 09:11 AM (ISO 8601)
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Evoker avatar by kpenguin. Evoker Pony by Dirtytabs. Grey Mouser, disciple of cupcakes by me. Any and all commiepuppies by BRC
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2011-06-22, 09:13 AM (ISO 8601)
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I'm developing a game. Let's see what happens! Complex.
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2011-06-22, 09:36 AM (ISO 8601)
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2011-06-22, 09:54 AM (ISO 8601)
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Ask me about our low price vacation plans in the Elemental Plane of Puppies and PieSpoiler
Evoker avatar by kpenguin. Evoker Pony by Dirtytabs. Grey Mouser, disciple of cupcakes by me. Any and all commiepuppies by BRC
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The name is "tonberrian", even when it begins a sentence. It's magic, I ain't gotta 'splain why.
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Ask me about our low price vacation plans in the Elemental Plane of Puppies and PieSpoiler
Evoker avatar by kpenguin. Evoker Pony by Dirtytabs. Grey Mouser, disciple of cupcakes by me. Any and all commiepuppies by BRC
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I'm developing a game. Let's see what happens! Complex.
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