My Little Pony LII: 525.600 Ponies!

[SlyGuyMcFly]

Have we ever discussed the possibility of Equestria being a demon planet in the Eye of Terror? I think I might have brought this up once, but it's probably a long time ago. I mean, some of the happenings in Ponyville can only be attributed to chaos.

I think it's come up before in the thread (or maybe I just had the same idea at some point, not sure). Celestia and Luna are minor deities sustained by their subjects, and Discord is an Undivided or Tzeentchian Daemon Prince... The propensity of ponies to have complete breakdowns in the vein of Lesson Zero and Party of One could be due to being surrounded by the Warp rather than a quirk of pony psychology, and being inside the Eye would explain the strange wildlife and inconsistent physics.

It's a bit difficult to believe such a peaceful land as Equestria wouldn't be quickly overrun by servants of the greater gods, but one could suppose Tzeentch is keeping it hidden from the others while he studies the miniature equine's ability to harness the magic of friendship... Just about plausible, I think.

[DigoDragon]

I can't see any of the pictures, the links are apparently broken (or my computer!)

Tarnation! I pasted the wrong links. Okay, I fixed the original post now. Sorry 'bout that.

O ye of little faith!

Don't use yer fancy sorcery to muddy the issue. We be ponies of science!

I dislike the notion of extinction at that level, but it's a natural consequence of mapping Equestria to earth rather than earth to Equestria. The nature of the light is important but that's a plot-pull of later discussion.

I do agree on that point, as my argument would be based on the idea that the ponies are basically controlling weather and movement of celestial objects, but not changing the nature of their physical abilities. If their magic does replace what we know of with natural sciences, then I would be wrong in my theory.

Ok I'm sorry, things were just getting a little too argumentative for my taste for a disscussion over cartoon physics. I just was hoping we could tone it down a bit.

Can do!

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[DigoDragon]

So I can share with the new part 2:

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Ah! So now we see the plot that began the relationship between the shakey young colt and the innocent loving princess.

"...haha, triple entendre!"

Have we ever discussed the possibility of Equestria being a demon planet in the Eye of Terror?

I don't recall seeing such such a conversation if it happened, but since I was also looking up something in the Elder Scrolls game history, I'm now thinking of Equestria being a realm of Oblivion. >_>
Hmmm, Celestia as a daedra prince...

[Kd7sov]

Interesting. Both Strategos and Anarion came up with lists that are like mine except with Pinkie and Rarity switched, but neither so much as mentioned the fact. Evidence continues to accumulate...

[Tiki Snakes]

....Just searched deviant Art, they only made a ponymod for Fallout 2 only turns the player =/, haven't really found for the other games yet.

Huh, hadn't heard about any old-fallout mods. That could work a lot better than the few bits I've seen for Skyrim and Fallout3 and so on, I would imagine. Will have to have a look.

[Nameless]

Everypony who may not remember it let me remind you of the joy that is Book Fortress:

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So I can share with the new part 2:

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Now with 20% more dancing Shining Armor

See, if that happened to me, I would have probably just kicked the fortress down and walked pass.

I had a pretty rough-and-tumble relationship with my siblings.

[Soras Teva Gee]

See, if that happened to me, I would have probably just kicked the fortress down and walked pass.

I had a pretty rough-and-tumble relationship with my siblings.

And that's undoubtedly why your sister doesn't sing an awesome song about you and you relationship with her.

[Nameless]

And that's undoubtedly why your sister doesn't sing an awesome song about you and you relationship with her.

Throwing her against the wall was a sign that I loved her.

[Soras Teva Gee]

Throwing her against the wall was a sign that I loved her.

I'm just going to say that wasn't funny and move along...

[Nameless]

I'm just going to say that wasn't funny and move along...

Play-fighting. We did a lot of play-fighting when we were younger. Like I said, "Rough-and-tumble", not to give you the wrong idea.

[One Tin Soldier]

Ok, I just had a thought, and I have to know whether it already exists or not.
Is there a ponified version of the Team America: World Police theme? Because I can almost hear it right now...

Equestria!
BUCK YEAH!
Friendship is the only way yeah...

[Lix Lorn]

Ah! So now we see the plot that began the relationship between the shakey young colt and the innocent loving princess.

"...haha, triple entendre!"

Beautiful. xD

[Alabenson]

you ponies are so boring
*turns to leave*
*stops abruptly*
wait, you have "unacceptable levels of collateral damage"?

To be honest, that was my reaction as well. Frankly I'm more than a little scared to think of the level of destruction that the professor would consider "unacceptable".

[Forum Explorer]

....Just searched deviant Art, they only made a ponymod for Fallout 2 only turns the player =/, haven't really found for the other games yet.

I heard that they were recruiting people to make a full out Fallout Equestria game.

See, if that happened to me, I would have probably just kicked the fortress down and walked pass.

I had a pretty rough-and-tumble relationship with my siblings.

For me my siblings would have likely just walked around the fortress (kitchen has two entrances) or sent the giant dogs of doom to knock it down. Or ignored me. Really it depends on the sibling.

[Tiki Snakes]

To be honest, that was my reaction as well. Frankly I'm more than a little scared to think of the level of destruction that the professor would consider "unacceptable".

I'm mostly amused that a pony who claims to be on the side of righteousness would entertain the idea of there being such a thing as acceptable levels of collatoral damage.

It's so refreshingly callous. Not altogether unsuprising though, I did see what he did to Canterlot.

[Maxtronaut]

Ponythread a challenge!

I challenge all of you to find me a more relevant picture then this:

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I don't think it can be done... also click for huge vector version

Isn't there a picture around here of Scootaloo riding a shark that has lazers attached to it, and Scootaloo is also holding a lazer gun?

@Thubby: If you leave, you will lose a vital source of food. Me. :P

EDIT: This is far more relevant, but I don't think it counts since it's a video.

[Nameless]

For me my siblings would have likely just walked around the fortress (kitchen has two entrances) or sent the giant dogs of doom to knock it down. Or ignored me. Really it depends on the sibling.

Being the eldest has it's perks, I must say.

I do remember making forts out of VCR cases fairly often. We always had a ton of live action/animated films. Still do actually... only in DVD form.

I miss videos, forts just don't feel the same when they're made out of DVD cases. .-.

[DigoDragon]

See, if that happened to me, I would have probably just kicked the fortress down and walked pass.

My daughter occasionally creates "impenetrable walls" that I cannot pass. So I just roll up my sleeves and counter by grabbing one of her three four Pinkie Pies and attack with a Dance Fight.

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...I usually lose anyway.

[Alabenson]

I'm mostly amused that a pony who claims to be on the side of righteousness would entertain the idea of there being such a thing as acceptable levels of collatoral damage.

It's so refreshingly callous. Not altogether unsuprising though, I did see what he did to Canterlot.

First of all, compared to the body-snatching cult leader and the eldritch abomination, the professor is on the side of righteousness. Granted, it would be more accurate to say that he’s closer to something vaguely resembling what might be construed as the side of righteousness than they are, but still.

Secondly, the professor wasn't entirely responsible for what happened to Canterlot. There were a number of other parties blowing things up left and right there, one of whom had rigged the entire city to blow up ahead of time.

My daughter occasionally creates "impenetrable walls" that I cannot pass. So I just roll up my sleeves and counter by grabbing one of her three four Pinkie Pies and attack with a Dance Fight.

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...I usually lose anyway.

Let's be honest, though, when something results in a Pinkie Pie Dance Fight, everypony wins.

[Anarion]

Quick thought of the day. (Of which I don't get often.)

Have we ever discussed the possibility of Equestria being a demon planet in the Eye of Terror? I think I might have brought this up once, but it's probably a long time ago. I mean, some of the happenings in Ponyville can only be attributed to chaos.

Well, this would explain all the crazy physics, since the Eye of Terror is pretty much free reign for "anything works, no matter how crazy it is!" Equestria isn't really in keeping with any of the four major chaos gods though. Certainly not Nergle, given the lack of decay or corruption, and not Khorne, given the lack of conflict. Tzeentch is always possible because anything can fit into a crazy complex plot somehow, but I don't really see a good one here, and Slaanesh is probably the most likely, since even sincere joy is a form of indulgence.

I don't recall seeing such such a conversation if it happened, but since I was also looking up something in the Elder Scrolls game history, I'm now thinking of Equestria being a realm of Oblivion. >_>
Hmmm, Celestia as a daedra prince...

Oh this could work too. Although Celestia would need to be a Daedra princess, of course. But the power level seems pretty close to correct, with Discord being a more crazy Daedra like Sheogorrath.

Interesting. Both Strategos and Anarion came up with lists that are like mine except with Pinkie and Rarity switched, but neither so much as mentioned the fact. Evidence continues to accumulate...

I did read your list, sorry I didn't cite you. Our line of reasoning was a bit different, and I thought switching Pinkie and Rarity was a big enough difference that they weren't really similar. Particularly since I derived my trait for Pinkie near the end after assigning Rarity for totally different reasons.

[Kairaven]

Got the John De Lancie voice message, he changed a couple words but it was great. Now I just need to find some file share site.

Still no word on sketch :(

[asdflove]

Anyone have any ideas for Nale's cutie mark?

[Pokonic]

I don't recall seeing such such a conversation if it happened, but since I was also looking up something in the Elder Scrolls game history, I'm now thinking of Equestria being a realm of Oblivion. >_>
Hmmm, Celestia as a daedra prince...

Naw, Discord is the prince, Celestia is one of those opposite creatures that rarly show up in the games.

Anyone have any ideas for Nale's cutie mark?

A bolt of green magic crossed with a red sword to show his multiclassing. And evilness.

[asdflove]

A bolt of green magic crossed with a red sword to show his multiclassing. And evilness.

Thanks, any ideas for Sabine's?

[Nameless]

My daughter occasionally creates "impenetrable walls" that I cannot pass. So I just roll up my sleeves and counter by grabbing one of her three four Pinkie Pies and attack with a Dance Fight.

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...I usually lose anyway.

To be honest, if you...

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Let's be honest, though, when something results in a Pinkie Pie Dance Fight, everypony wins.

Yeah, that.

[Soras Teva Gee]

Isn't there a picture around here of Scootaloo riding a shark that has lazers attached to it, and Scootaloo is also holding a lazer gun?

You mean this:

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Pretty good but as awesome as Scootaloo is, Fausticorn is more relevant any day.

EDIT: This is far more relevant, but I don't think it counts since it's a video.

Hah Hah a valiant effort. Oh Ocarina of Time may we never be without your madly beautiful music.

[Deadly]

Grammar Nazis needed

So I sent my story II off to EqD. I seem to get all the very strict prereaders who like to focus on punctuation and such other issues. It's so tedious

So I need help combing through the story. Any help would be greatly appreciated.

Below are some specific issues I got in response, along with my own comments.

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You’ve a serious issue with obnoxiously stacked descriptors in your opening pages.

What what? Anyone able to point out what "obnoxiously stacked descriptors" this might be refering to?

Comma splices. This is a pretty chronic issue, and you’ve really got to address it.

Ah! Comma splices! Please! Please! Please look for these especially! Comb every line! Let's remove every comma and replace it with full stops! Death to all sentences longer than 10 words!

Kidding, or course, but do look for them. Comma splices annoy me because worrying about them makes me remove lots of probably perfectly acceptable commas and replace them with full stops, resulting in very short lines and a story that reads in parts as if it was written for small children.

Worrying about these damn trivialities of punctuation really cramps my writing and turns it from something fluid and creative into a boring drudgery.

This is why there are editors, dammit![/rant!]

Italicize direct thoughts.

I'll be looking for these myself too, but if you notice any direct thoughts that aren't properly italicized or something, do let me know.

of the living,” he said while working

Missing comma. This is something of a chronic issue for you.

I can not for the life of me find any missing comma there. Anyone care to illuminate me?

It was breathtaking.

You really want to be careful with casual narration. You’re writing from 3rd person omniscient here, and so want to say objective unless directly relaying a character perspective. Be aware of the line as you carry on.

I have no idea what that comment is trying to tell me. I wasn't aware that I was writing omniscient, as far as I'm aware everything so far has been strictly limited to Dash's perspective, only those things she knows or can observe. This particular case is definitely not omniscient, it's just Dash' personal opinion. I mean, 'It was breathtaking' isn't something you need to be omniscient to think.

Am I missing something there?

[Maxtronaut]

You mean this:

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I just realized, if you watch the GIF while playing the music I posted, than you gaze into one of the 12 hearts of awesomeness.

[asdflove]

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Stupid Skeleton! Uhhhhggg! http://asdflove.deviantart.com/art/P...ykon-325366154

http://asdflove.deviantart.com/art/P...loak-325351301 Redcloak

MITD-http://asdflove.deviantart.com/art/M...fied-325332744

and The one and only Belkar Bitterleaf! http://asdflove.deviantart.com/art/P...-WAR-325000257

Out of the blue I show up with art. I love Ponifiying things.
http://asdflove.deviantart.com/art/H...fied-324734385
http://asdflove.deviantart.com/art/P...Elan-324688093
http://asdflove.deviantart.com/art/E...ddle-324748159

(Sorry That I just linked it, they are far too big to put here as an image, even in a spoiler box)

And now V. But I'm not super happy with this one. Not androgynous enough.
http://asdflove.deviantart.com/art/P...vius-324948639

Aaaand Roy's turn
http://asdflove.deviantart.com/art/P...-Roy-324959487

Durkon- http://asdflove.deviantart.com/art/P...rkon-324984292

http://asdflove.deviantart.com/art/Group-Shot-325193295 They be all together!

(Find the rest through here)

Nale:http://asdflove.deviantart.com/art/P...Nale-325503348

[Kd7sov]

Grammar Nazis needed

So I sent my story II off to EqD. I seem to get all the very strict prereaders who like to focus on punctuation and such other issues. It's so tedious

So I need help combing through the story. Any help would be greatly appreciated.

Below are some specific issues I got in response, along with my own comments.

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Kidding, or course, but do look for them. Comma splices annoy me because worrying about them makes me remove lots of probably perfectly acceptable commas and replace them with full stops, resulting in very short lines and a story that reads in parts as if it was written for small children.

Worrying about these damn trivialities of punctuation really cramps my writing and turns it from something fluid and creative into a boring drudgery.

This is why there are editors, dammit![/rant!]

Comma splices are actually very simple. You can say "I ran. I escaped." You can also say "I ran; I escaped." But if you say "I ran, I escaped," then it's a comma splice. Joining two independent clauses (complete ideas) with only a comma is considered a no-no. There certainly are cases where I'd consider such a phrasing acceptable, but if it's a deal-breaker at EqD then it's certainly worth keeping in mind.

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I can not for the life of me find any missing comma there. Anyone care to illuminate me?

I don't think it's actually missing, but I know people who would claim you need a comma between "said" and "while".

Not having read the story, I couldn't say much to the other issues.