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2011-10-04, 08:31 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: My Little Pony XXVI: Applebloom to Zecora!
and I've been listening to THIS all day, and I blame you.
Just cuz I can~
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2011-10-04, 08:34 PM (ISO 8601)
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2011-10-04, 08:37 PM (ISO 8601)
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2011-10-04, 08:41 PM (ISO 8601)
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Spoil'd for pre-reader response text.
SpoilerHere's what I sent:
1.) Tags: [Dark][Sci-fi][Adventure][(History) Crossover]
2.) Title: Blue Moon in a Red Sky
3.) Description:
One thousand years ago, a new theory on magic leads to the discovery of Equestria's greatest weapon. The timing couldn't be worse; the United Stables and Union of Socialist Stallions Republic are at each other's throats. Ponykind must survive this cold war with a new kind of warfare; love and tolerance.
4.) Links:
(Links to the next and previous chapter are at the bottom of each chapter.)
Prologue: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1.../edit?hl=en_US
Chapter 1: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1.../edit?hl=en_US
2: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1.../edit?hl=en_US
3: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1.../edit?hl=en_US
4: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1.../edit?hl=en_US
5: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1.../edit?hl=en_US
5.) Characters: OCs, Tabula Rasa characters, Celestia and Luna
6.) Completion: Incomplete (1 of 4 crises, or 5 of ~20 chapters)
7.) Additional Tags: Celestia is a Communist, Pony Cold War
8.) Author: Dromer
This desperately needs a grammar and punctuation check.
Nice switch; the diamonds seem to impart memories now, though it's still morbid.
It was really difficult to understand what the author was doing and why. This entire story appears to be a bizarre mishmash of bits of Earth history and Ponies... with very little cohesiveness between the two. The story flits around so much, that it's next to impossible to understand what's going on... and after reading 3 chapters, I rapidly lost interest.
I think that's something else that bothered me; too much is left unsaid. Some of the ponies were created somehow? But there's no explanation for that. It's just.. hand-waved.
I find it too difficult to care about the characters. I don't read a story because I want to work. I read a story because I want to relax and be entertained in some fashion. This story fails to do those things.
I give it the same mark I did before: It -NEEDS- Ponychan and not an author-provided overhaul.
It's probably more of a 'not their cup of tea', but I'm guessing the issue may reside some dissonance between the reviewers and the pre-readers.
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2011-10-04, 08:43 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: My Little Pony XXVI: Applebloom to Zecora!
Yeah I'm on what I think is currently the most recent chapter. I've found it enjoyable enough, much better than some stuff I've read.
I'll admit I've squeed over some stories being posted, and a male 16-year-old squeeing is... well let's just say it disturbed me that it happened.My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic: The Thread, The Game, The Tumblr.
Human Crossings Avatar made by Thanqol
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2011-10-04, 08:55 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: My Little Pony XXVI: Applebloom to Zecora!
There's a few things you can do based on what they said, double-check all the grammar, spelling, and punctuation. Break up long sentences. Basically do the opposite of what I do, instead of having long rambling lines and tons of commas instead of a properly formatted structure. (Edit: I do that a lot, I'm not saying you do but it is the one thing that got mentioned which could be easily corrected.)
Edit: Giving Ch1 a quick skim through, it looks more like it just wasn't the reviewers' "thing" rather than significant problems. There may be typos and grammatical errors but nothing I spotted immediately. Probably the best change would be a clearer warning that the story involves historical crossovers and that those not into such things probably won't enjoy it as much.Last edited by Beeskee; 2011-10-04 at 09:08 PM.
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2011-10-04, 08:55 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: My Little Pony XXVI: Applebloom to Zecora!
Definitely 'not their cup of tea' vibe I got there. Admittedly, I was a little surprised they were looking for such stringent standards now. I seen the reviews on ponychan; it's difficult to say really, I think your fic is good enough as it is, but I suppose it is true it is not everypony's cup of tea.
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2011-10-04, 09:13 PM (ISO 8601)
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2011-10-04, 09:17 PM (ISO 8601)
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I should probably leave the honours to Espredrek, y'know, since he wrote it and all.
Oh who am I kidding
LINK'D!
Holy cripes
That's cool! Who knew she could transform into a badflank just by putting on an eyepatch.
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2011-10-04, 09:22 PM (ISO 8601)
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Is it bad the first thing I noticed about the General Derpy comic is "Luna making a sammich SQUEEE"
Ask me about our low price vacation plans in the Elemental Plane of Puppies and PieSpoiler
Evoker avatar by kpenguin. Evoker Pony by Dirtytabs. Grey Mouser, disciple of cupcakes by me. Any and all commiepuppies by BRC
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2011-10-04, 09:26 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: My Little Pony XXVI: Applebloom to Zecora!
I'm currently in a half-comatose state (yay, no sleep and then work!) so I'm just gonna say thanks, everypony.
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2011-10-04, 09:29 PM (ISO 8601)
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2011-10-04, 09:44 PM (ISO 8601)
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Curses, these threads move so fast.
Still around, and still watching. It's just that I'm quietly watching from the shadows of the thread. Always.
Yes, even then.LGBTitP
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2011-10-04, 09:52 PM (ISO 8601)
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2011-10-04, 09:58 PM (ISO 8601)
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2011-10-04, 10:14 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: My Little Pony XXVI: Applebloom to Zecora!
ETA:
This is minimalist, slow, and really, really badass:
The Edge of Night - Friendship is Magic PMVLast edited by Kindablue; 2011-10-04 at 10:20 PM.
... I came to appreciate that mountains make poor receptacles for dreams.
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2011-10-04, 10:17 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: My Little Pony XXVI: Applebloom to Zecora!
Bronies, I just realized this:
We're having a Luna/Halloween Episode. Which means, Friendship is Magic + Luna + This Song = The Best Halloween EVER!!!
you know that I'm more than just a doll do you?-Geno
Add me on Steam!
Spoilerby Thecrimsonmage and By Shades of Gray by Akrim.elf
and current made by me.
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2011-10-04, 10:40 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: My Little Pony XXVI: Applebloom to Zecora!
Thanks all. Today was a better day, though it was busy. This week has apparently just decided to kick me around...
I hope things go well for you guys. I'm sorry to hear the past few days have been so turbulent.
General Derpy is AWESOME! I would totally follow her to Hades and back!This Machine Surrounds Hate And Forces It To Surrender
Ponythread Learns to Draw!
SpoilerBleeeeh! Alfalfa Monster!
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2011-10-04, 10:47 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: My Little Pony XXVI: Applebloom to Zecora!
AVATAR WORK
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here we have the first two that I did as roughs.
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PROS
- more detail; gritty character lends itself better to my art style
- succeeds at intimidating Mafioso posture
CONS
- hand/cane position anatomically wrong (looks good though)
- bust style not what recipient wanted
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PROS
- shows whole body
- good practice
CONS
- body to covered; works best as a bust/portrait
- anatomy defies standard ideas of positioning; huge arms + tiny legs = implied perspective fail
- cane came out wonky
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From these I learned a bit more about my strengths. Having the diamond dog be fully clothed would work much better than having partial clothing such as a single vest or open blazer. Tie is a hit (though I'm considering a bow tie).
DIAMOND DOG ANATOMY
D-Dogs have thick, pop-eye style forearms, and stubby, comically sized rear legs. Their elbows are ball and socket joints, and frequently bend "backwards" when the elbow is above the head.
For example; the first attempt had elbows below the head, hands below the elbows. Unless the cane was 10" long, the elbows would be above the shoulder, and the forearms would slope down sharply. Weird.
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Their usual vest style gives them a strong triangular silhouette, broad shouldered. In reality, they are scrawny buggers with splayed arms. Posture is horrific, though I suppose that could be why the avatar uses a cane- to stand tall over his fellows.
The second anatomy example uses the same head shape as the leader of the D-Dogs, as does the first example avatar. The other head styles are these;
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Of which I think the second would be good, but not as strong a choice. The leader has the pointed, "chiseled" jaw one expects from a criminal master. Same with the eyes; flat lines underneath, rounded tops and yet strong brow ridges give him a mean, calculated and hate-filled look. D-Dog head #3, the one with down ears, could get the same effect with effort, and has a more pleasing head shape when discounting the eyes. The two could be mixed if needed.
STYLE OF DRESS
Looking at previous attempts, I have to change my stance;*
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The Sher Khan, fully cloned look does wonders for the D-Dog physique. Like any good Mafioso uniform, it hides apparent weakness and gives a sense of stability and bulk that looking at the exposed, stooped torso doesn't.
The hat is a fixture that will stay. It's nice. Positioning though;
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Works best at the leve (#3)l, or even the head tilted forward design (#1). Looking downwards, where you can see the underside of the hat brim, gives less a sense of strength. We want him staring forward like he's ready for a fight;
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SUGGESTED COURSE OF ACTION
I suggest the following.
Fully clothed D-Dog, tie tucked into blazer.
Either
— leader head (as current) with no eyepatch (keep acar)
— bigger D-Dog head with eyepatch
Facing camera, hands on cane
Hat brim level with camera
Alternate poses considered where looking at pocket watch, arms folded with cane inside (looking over shoulder lime in Dexam's avatar), or hands steeples in front of face, holding cane (showing just eyes and maybe nose; works best as close up and not full-body).
I can try pretty much anything, but I won't be able to help you out unless you can think of specifics. The more detail you give me, the less I will let you down. This is not an Art of the Dress style episode! XD
If you can Think of the picture you want in your mind, and give me detailed descriptions, I'll work on it for you. Otherwise, we're going to continue withphoneavatar tag. I'm fine with that, but I suspect both you and Thanqol are rip-roarin' and ready for the next phase
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You guys suck. The more I think about it, the more I realize that horrid, barely scraping by why am I doing this? Feeling was enjoyable. I will go over the scrap story and see if I can make it presentable enough for mixed company.
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Working seven days a week puts a big damper on my free time. I'm jonesin' to geek with other people, and I suspect Braz would, um...
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Be upset if I were to spend more time on the online videogamings, even if only the gearings of the third war.
Heavens help me, I think I'm going to have to look into the pony RP threads
Thanqol, make November come faster!
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Braz? Honey? What happened to the bathroom mirrors? And the oven door? And all the other conveniently mirror-like surfaces in the apartment?
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They often don't show up. I don't know what it is but I haven't been able to rate anything for months. Irritating.
Aww, this means I have a crappy out-of-date iPhone.
Hi Rappy! How ya doin?
Still around, and still watching. It's just that I'm quietly watching from the shadows of the thread. Always.
Yes, even then.
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Hmph. The more clever ponies we get, the less awesome I become.
I must find a way to fix this. To the SELFIMPROVEMENT-O-TRON!
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2011-10-04, 10:47 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: My Little Pony XXVI: Applebloom to Zecora!
so...you are saying you like to watch...
yeah...i dont think that even rates a blip on the strange-ometer in THIS thread
ooooooo, bad news then... they have this up over on EQD atm
3.) The complete history of Soviet Equestria arranged to the Melody of Tetris http://www.youtube.com/embed/YMFVY57dksELast edited by otakuryoga; 2011-10-04 at 10:52 PM.
Ponies not only make ME want to be a better person than I was before they entered my life, they make me want to HELP OTHERS be better people too.
And that is a GOOD thing by any definition.
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2011-10-04, 10:52 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: My Little Pony XXVI: Applebloom to Zecora!
Thanks to Dirty Tabs for the Travis pony.
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Thanks to A Thousand Words for the My Little Simhata avatar, and thanks to Trixie for fixing the cropping.
Breakdown Twilight from Pony Halloween celebration, thanks to Thanqol.
Thanks to Akrim.Elf for the awesome Laharl pony.
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2011-10-04, 10:56 PM (ISO 8601)
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Why doesn't Fiddler on the Roof have an all Pony cast that would be so much better.
Edit: Also why does it have to be so long?Last edited by Roninhirox; 2011-10-04 at 10:58 PM.
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2011-10-04, 11:10 PM (ISO 8601)
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This is the best ED banner I've seen:
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Sorry to hear that. If it makes you feel any better, I would sacrifice drifters to you. I would say virgins, but school started recently and those aren't in season.
Not pony, but, well... I'm kind of one note, you see.... I came to appreciate that mountains make poor receptacles for dreams.
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2011-10-04, 11:11 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: My Little Pony XXVI: Applebloom to Zecora!
I've been doing alright. Writing stuff for my own personal projects (urban fantasy, not Pony), still kinda geek fangirling over John de Lancie essentially reprising Q with Discord in this season of MLP, reading various stuff, playing video games (Shin Megami Tensei: Devil Survivor Overclocked in particular)... The usual.
...Well played.LGBTitP
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2011-10-04, 11:17 PM (ISO 8601)
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2011-10-04, 11:29 PM (ISO 8601)
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*GL-fan-nerdgasm*
Okay, gotta save that! (And now I suddenly want to see Fluttershy as a Blue Lantern or Star Sapphire - not sure just at the moment which is more appropriate. Oo, and Angryshy as a Red Lantern. And Discorded Fluttershy and/or Pinkie in the Sinestro Corps. [Sheesh, just how many kinds of Lantern can Fluttershy possibly fit as anyway?].)
Since I'm on Ponibooru and posting at the same time, have some d'aw:
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Also, Ponysona!
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Wow this is bigger than it looked on Ponibooru.
And also, this image genuinely scares me:
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ZevoxToph Pony avatar by Dirtytabs. Thanks!
"When I was ten, I read fairy tales in secret and would have been ashamed if I had been found doing so. Now that I am fifty, I read them openly. When I became a man, I put away childish things, including the fear of childishness and the desire to be very grown up." -C.S. Lewis
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2011-10-04, 11:32 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: My Little Pony XXVI: Applebloom to Zecora!
Thanks to Dirty Tabs for the Travis pony.
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Thanks to A Thousand Words for the My Little Simhata avatar, and thanks to Trixie for fixing the cropping.
Breakdown Twilight from Pony Halloween celebration, thanks to Thanqol.
Thanks to Akrim.Elf for the awesome Laharl pony.
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2011-10-04, 11:34 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: My Little Pony XXVI: Applebloom to Zecora!
I'll just leave this here...
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2011-10-04, 11:44 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: My Little Pony XXVI: Applebloom to Zecora!
Here's some more:
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ETA:
Fear.
Get some headphones.Last edited by Kindablue; 2011-10-04 at 11:49 PM.
... I came to appreciate that mountains make poor receptacles for dreams.
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2011-10-04, 11:48 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: My Little Pony XXVI: Applebloom to Zecora!
Thanks to Dirty Tabs for the Travis pony.
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Thanks to A Thousand Words for the My Little Simhata avatar, and thanks to Trixie for fixing the cropping.
Breakdown Twilight from Pony Halloween celebration, thanks to Thanqol.
Thanks to Akrim.Elf for the awesome Laharl pony.