The shoulders of the dress are supposed to be a bit poofy, though some folds would have made it more clear. The actual right shoulder under the dress would be at where the braid touches the dress in the first pic. Or would that still be too wide?

I think i'll make another disembodied head to fiddle with until i can get the look right. I just don't have the feel for sculpting faces yet, so catching the mistakes is tough. There's also the overfixing from the overtly prominent noses to far too rounded faces .
I'll try to have the first draft for it up sometime tomorrow.

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A guard patrol.


A morgh blackguard with fiendish minions.


Parry...

...and Counter.


And a mobile artillery convoy with air cover.


Set up to fire before rapidly relocating.