My Little Pony XXI: A Very Minty Thread

[MCerberus]

All the FFRP is good and all, but could we please keep it contained in, I dunno, a Silly Message Board Game/Free Form Roleplaying thread? Character chat isn't exactly what I go to the Media Discussions forum for...

I think we should all remember that we seemed to have agreed long ago that when this kind of stuff happens, we'd keep it in spoilers and post something pony with it.

[EsperDerek]

I'd argue that there's a difference between a goofy impromptu thing that is over and done in about 30-40 posts, based around actual pony content (pictures), and the 10+ page epics that the previous threads have contained, though.

[Metahuman1]

I'm with Esper on this one. But if you want to go back too media discussions, here's something.

What preparations are everyone taking for the debut of season 2?

[Kindablue]

Rainbow Factory (I really like this one)
Are You Proud to be a Brony [PMV] (Fixed Audio) (a little too Jack Johnson for me, but it's well put together)

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Did this get posted?
Something's WRONG with MY LITTLE PONY Friendship is magic

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I'd argue that there's a difference between a goofy impromptu thing that is over and done in about 30-40 posts, based around actual pony content (pictures), and the 10+ page epics that the previous threads have contained, though.

A difference that can only be detected in hindsight.

[otakuryoga]

sadly there is not much i can do since my cable company doesnt carry the hub

we get it at the hospital where i work, but thats a 35 minute drive.

so i just gotta troll youtube and hit refresh every 5 minutes til somepony gets the show up


in other news watched the last two episodes this morning before coming in to work so i can now properly join everyone else in their hatred for Prince Blue Blood

[Metahuman1]

*Gives you offical Doom to Blueblood Campaign Pin.*

Welcome too the club!

[Deadly]

So just wanted to drop by to Announce my upcoming sequel to Fillystata, entitled "Mare in the Mirror". First chapter should be up in a day or two I hope.

[Capt. Ido Nos]

Well, I'm afraid Ima have to say goodbye for this weekend. Weekend retreat with like NO service. See yall later!

[Trixie]

Or that When Twilight is greeting guests, the one who shakes her Hoof and the rest of he with it has the constellation Hercules as his Cutie Mark?

Wasn't that constellation of Orion, though?

Hmmm, suddenly, I have a minor Background character who, in so far as I know, doesn't even have a name, to ship with Twilight. Ponythread, GO!

You mean the above?

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http://s152.photobucket.com/albums/s...agle/ponymote/
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Btw, aren't these ones I added to OP? :P

Rarity does a Tyler Durden impression near the end.

No, we already named him. He's Blues Mayne, billionaire playcolt by day, crime fighting vigilante by night. Of course, there's almost no crime in Equestria, so he spends most of his time in setting one.

Tyler who?

You mean he actually commits crime himself?

So, another item, Rarity, Love interest now that Blue Blood is OFFICIALLY off the table, for season 2. Thoughts?

Well, if fanwork is to be believed it would be AJ...

More stuff about that fic I may or may not write follows, for those who still don't want spoilers.

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Well, the thing about this story is that it doesn't need to be flawless and convince the audience, it just needs to be good enough to
convince Rainbow Dash.

Ah, in that case, Rainbow is rather naive and flattery-hungry. Just watch second episode for arguments Nightmare Moon used?

You can even make her loyalty her weakness this time

It stands for "One True Pairing". Basically "who is the best couple". I'm surprised. Usually people over on Ponychan are fiercely defensive of their favorite pairing. But over here on Ponythread, not so much.

Eh, you just haven't read many AotRS or Esper's posts...

[Beacon of Chaos]

You know who else looks good in the nurse outfit?

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The one who's actually a nurse

Well, I'm afraid Ima have to say goodbye for this weekend. Weekend retreat with like NO service. See yall later!

Later dude!

[Kindablue]

Tyler who?

At one point in the movie, Brad Pitt's character in Fight Club gets punched in the face several times and, instead of fighting back, jumps on top of his attacker and shakes his head around until they're both covered in blood. It looks a lot like this, though I don't know if that was intentional.

Well, I'm afraid Ima have to say goodbye for this weekend. Weekend retreat with like NO service. See yall later!

Have fun!

[dromer]

Finished revisions on Blue Moon in a Red Sky. Now no longer in a browser-breakingly huge document! Hopefully, I made things a bit more interesting than forty pages of exposition. As always, reviews are welcome- and encouraged! Be sure to PM me your thoughts, even if it is just a TL;DR.

Anyway, here's the links.
Blue Moon in a Red Sky (Still a Working Title) [Crossover][Dark][Adventure?][Also tons of OCs]
Chapter 1
Chapter 2
Chapter 3
Chapter 4
Thanks in advance.

[Trixie]

I say that she wasn't really interested in him, but rather interested in the fantasy of getting swept off her feet by a handsome prince. Needless to say, the actual day involved very little sweeping.

Unless it gets replaced by another fantasiful relationship, such as a millionare from Manehatten, I don't forsee another "love interest". Rarity hasn't really shown any interested in a specific pony as opposed to the prestige or title.

Eh, If you watch Ticket Master again, you'll see she cared more about the jewels and grand wedding than him, IMHO. Search will just continue, I don't see Rarity digging lower than Twilight in whole of Ponyville

..... I am a horrible pony. Heaven's light/hellfire parody.
I made up the latin, so it's likely inaccurate.

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So many times out here
I've watched a happy pair
Of ponies trotting in the night
They had a kind of glow around them
It almost looked like rainbow's light

I knew one'd never know
That fun and loving glow
Though I might wish with all my might
No family as serious as my own
Was ever meant for a joyfull sight

But suddenly a Rainboom has shined at me
And paint my cheek with a smile so bright

I dare to dream for me
to throw a big party
And as I deck these walls tonight
My cold rock farm will seem so bright
I swear it must be rainbow's light

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Celestia Dea Omnipotenti
Beatae Luna semper Fortuna
Beatae Twilighti Sanctifica
consensia elementum omnibus equus

Beata Luna
You know I am a joyous mare
Of my parties I am justly proud

Et Celebritas

Beata Luna
You know I'm so much funner than
The common, average, sad, and boring crowd

Quia turba taedium

Then tell me, Luna
Why they refuse my invites then
Why their weak excuses still cause me woe

Vae dolor tristis

I see them, I hear them
Hiding from me every where
and plotting plans without me in tow

Verbo et opere

my ire
all liars
This mire that I'm in
This charming
flyer
Is printed for nothing!

It's all my fault

Mea culpa

They won't attend

Mea culpa

It is the party girl
That drove away her friends

Mea maxima culpa

It's all my fault

Mea culpa

and I despair

Mea culpa

that all my friends dislike my party fare

Mea maxima culpa


so call me pinkamena
Cakes and punch served out alone
turnips and rocks will be my party friends
Despicable ponies
And let me party all on my own
on lints and a bag of flour that I'll depend

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"I’m just glad none of dem Ponies showed up!"

"Oh, they’re not so bad."

"Not so bad?! Pu-lease! Dey’re a bunch’a losahs!"

"Oh, c’mon now. “Losers” might be a little strong, don’cha think?"

"After the way they treated you? I say “losers” isn’t strong enough!"

"Well, it was pretty rude."

"Prettee roode?! It waz down right deespecable!"

"It was, wasn’t it?!"

"If I were you, I wouldn’t speak to them ever again."

"You know what? I’m not gonna speak to them ever again! And I’m not gonna invite them to another party as long as I live! They don’t deserve to be invited to my parties... not after the way they’ve been acting."
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Pink ire
conspire
Now ponies, it's your turn
Choose me or
retire
join me or you I'll spurn

Party on forever

Have some more cake for her

Party on forever

Have some more punch for me

Party on forever

But they will be mine
Or they're all spurned!!

Parody of what it is, exactly?

Also, maybe we should begin collecting all the song parodies in one place? :P

About that first image dump...

pony...
selling thin mints.

I am yours to command.

Glad you liked it

And now! the moment... at least I have been waiting for.
My completed backgrounds. [/showoff]

I would like to know what you all think though.....

Twilight Sparkle

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Rainbow Dash

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Pinkie Pie

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Fluttershy

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Applejack

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Legacy of the Elements -unedited

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Legacy of the Elements- Neon

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*gulp* Just a note... The ponies themselves are Megasweet's the photos are google image search and celestia, luna and the elements are unknown to me.

*hides in a corner*

I see this already been critiqued, so I'll only mention the blurs. Also, last two seem to be rather... It needs more concept than just applying a simple effect, IMHO. You need to have a bit more direction, and edit it a bit. For example, neon lines dividing parts of the image are a bit distracting, and posterized version isn't that different from unedited one.

Plus, Photobucket really isn't the best place for posting art, unless you prepared it in this resolution (do you have a netbook?).

Yeah i noticed that, but didn't know why that was until now. I actually copied the thumbnail for Twilight instead of the full size image...
As for the background, its a picture through a telescope i believe, and that was the only one that seemed to go well, but my googlefu is weak, if you could find me a better one ill replace it!
As for rarity's background.... finding a pile of gems is nigh impossible. so i took a small pile and copy pasted it a dozen times....

Better sky?

Pile of Gems?

True, but you have to wonder why they sent Pinkie to live with relatives while her sisters stayed behind. Or perhaps to other relatives? That would be something they could touch on in season 2.

Well, somepony has to inherit the farm, no?

Pinkie might just have been declared the least fit to do that, and sent away.

[Rebelhero]

I see this already been critiqued, so I'll only mention the blurs. Also, last two seem to be rather... It needs more concept than just applying a simple effect, IMHO. You need to have a bit more direction, and edit it a bit. For example, neon lines dividing parts of the image are a bit distracting, and posterized version isn't that different from unedited one.

Plus, Photobucket really isn't the best place for posting art, unless you prepared it in this resolution (do you have a netbook?).



Better sky?

Pile of Gems?

Ah thank you Trixie! Ok, i fixed up Twilight. Also i messed up AGAIN on the pony resolutions. (i have NO training on photoshop, i am quite the noob... These we all hastily done at 4am. i will work on updating them..again.

[Thanqol]

Thanks, everypony, both for all of your compliments, and all of your nitpicks! This sort of stuff is exactly what I need to grow as a writer, and I'm a tough guy, I can take criticism well.

@Thanqol:

Yeah, some of your absolutely truly awful suggestions really would have made the date go from 'disaster but salvageable' to 'Welp, we're done here.' Thanks for the critiques on the language, both in dialogue and outside it, I'll go back and review them to tighten them up. I'll probably end up swiping some of your quotes there.

But what part of cutting off your own hoof in a crowded restaurant as a 'joke' isn't salvageable? Okay, actually, yes, you've got a point.

Really, practise shouting in front of a mirror. It seems silly and difficult to explain to your housemates but some words are strong and shoutable and some words just aren't.

Now, to get to work on editing. I'm going to make this thing as strong as I can.

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After reflecting on it a bit more, I actually came to the conclusion that this might benefit from more direct structuring. As in, a clearly labelled chapter, a terribad piece of advice, and then a scene. The formality gives you a few advantages, like letting the reader breathe and relax after one particular disaster, making the quotes fit into the narrative a bit better, and invokes the feel of reading a book which is kind of a point when the story's about misreading a book.

I also feel that the book gets almost absolved for responsibility for it's terrible advice on the grounds of being fifty years out of date. That advice is so bad it transcends space and time, and also, there's quite few actual outdated statements in there (no references to stallions gadding about with unshorn fetlocks, monocle etiquette etc [which, as we all know, was what fifty years ago WAS LIKE!]). I think a more direct "Nope, this is dumb" kinda verdict on it is what the book is screaming for and what it should get.

Oh yes, and I'm also not sure I picked up on how Shimmer found Midnight's secret spot?

[Trixie]

"i absolutely, freakishly, LOVE our benevolent hooved overlords"

I had feeling that most of the regulars here already morphed into that category :P

With how free-spirited pegasi on a whole seem to be, that's not all that surprising. Certainly less than the other two pony races by my reckoning.

Ponies - how to make three dozen unfortunate implications in PG show

One sister took over the farm, and one is a classical musician!

So, we accepted Photo Finish = RD when I wasn't looking?

Clearly ponies corrupted your mind.... and mine.

Lyra now means a mint green unicorn for me... Forever.

Technically, Minty is mint green, Lyra is more cyan/teal combo...

Old Gen Minty in New Gen format. (Edit: Also G3 Minty in G4 format!)

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Ah. Old one, you say? I was wondering why there seem to be 2 versions of her, and what clovers had to do with her

Here are some pictures, posted for no raison.
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Oh sweet, minecraft! That's fun right? Huh, it looks like this mountain got cut in half by a chunk error. Man, it just drops off, you wouldn't even know it was there unless you walked right off the edge!

Hunk error?

To me, it looks like camouflaged fortress, especially due to these stairs.

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need it for something

Out of curiosity, what are the colored squares?

Since we have a ponified Prince Ali/ Great Trixie, I thought it would be appropriate to Ponify the Reprise of that song:

Great Trixie, Yes it is she
but not as you know her
Take a look out of your books into reality
Yes, meet this mare who would dare
to try to start an affair
say hello to the real Great Trixie

So Trixie turns out to be merely an Earth Mare
Just a fraud, a talentless broad
as you can see
Her stage show is a sham
nothing more than a scam
All just because she wanted to impress
the hoof picked student of this land's princess
the truth displayed to your dismay
all your friends want her gone - whoopee!
So long ex-Great Trixie!

I'm sorry for doing this.

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[MCerberus]

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After reflecting on it a bit more, I actually came to the conclusion that this might benefit from more direct structuring. As in, a clearly labelled chapter, a terribad piece of advice, and then a scene. The formality gives you a few advantages, like letting the reader breathe and relax after one particular disaster, making the quotes fit into the narrative a bit better, and invokes the feel of reading a book which is kind of a point when the story's about misreading a book.

I also feel that the book gets almost absolved for responsibility for it's terrible advice on the grounds of being fifty years out of date. That advice is so bad it transcends space and time, and also, there's quite few actual outdated statements in there (no references to stallions gadding about with unshorn fetlocks, monocle etiquette etc [which, as we all know, was what fifty years ago WAS LIKE!]). I think a more direct "Nope, this is dumb" kinda verdict on it is what the book is screaming for and what it should get.

Oh yes, and I'm also not sure I picked up on how Shimmer found Midnight's secret spot?

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Hitchhiker's Guide to Dating!

[EsperDerek]

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After reflecting on it a bit more, I actually came to the conclusion that this might benefit from more direct structuring. As in, a clearly labelled chapter, a terribad piece of advice, and then a scene. The formality gives you a few advantages, like letting the reader breathe and relax after one particular disaster, making the quotes fit into the narrative a bit better, and invokes the feel of reading a book which is kind of a point when the story's about misreading a book.

I also feel that the book gets almost absolved for responsibility for it's terrible advice on the grounds of being fifty years out of date. That advice is so bad it transcends space and time, and also, there's quite few actual outdated statements in there (no references to stallions gadding about with unshorn fetlocks, monocle etiquette etc [which, as we all know, was what fifty years ago WAS LIKE!]). I think a more direct "Nope, this is dumb" kinda verdict on it is what the book is screaming for and what it should get.

Oh yes, and I'm also not sure I picked up on how Shimmer found Midnight's secret spot?

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Hmn. You might be right about the structure, it is pretty close to that as it is already, pulling the trigger and going all the way with it might be an idea way going about that...

So you think I should be more savage to the book itself? I suppose I could add to that, I just need to think of how to go about it, part of the reason why I went with date is because it's pretty snappy, so I'll think on it.

And I do mention it off-hand, maybe I should emphasize it more.

[Trixie]

Also: beast's, not beasts, unless there is more than one Ursa (in which case it would be beasts' )

Why?

See my offering of cupcakes (only partially eaten), muffins, kazoos, and icing! All this I give to you, and all I ask in return is the knowledge of what my Element of Ponythread shall be.

Your Element is....oooooh! Are those cupcakes!? For me For me For me!? Oooooh and I must must put some of that icing on it! Wanna dance dance dance? This song's my favorite!

Hmmmm....we seem to be having some complications. Perhaps a good nights sleep will work better...

Pink One: How about Element of Butterscotch? I love butterscotch!

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United Forever, In Friendship and Neighbor,
Our Great Equine Empire shall ever endure,
The Mighty Celestia in all of her grace,
Created this world to be our sacred place,

Long live our Equine Motherland,
Long live our Empire so Grand,
Long live Equestria united and Free,
Strong in our Friendship Trialed by Fire,
Long may that Violet flag Inspire,
Shining new glory for Ponies to see,

With Luna our princess, Our Ever Loved Goddess,
The Elements of Harmony Returned her to Grace,
The Night was Eternal, Her punishment Infernal,
Nightmare Moon was put in her Rightful Place,

Long live our Equine Motherland,
Long live our Empire so Grand,
Long live Equestria united and Free,
Strong in our Friendship Trialed by Fire
Long may that Violet flag Inspire,
Shining new glory for Ponies to see,

The struggle continues, The parasprites are bad news,
But we see right through them, we know they were abused,
With Faust our creator, we destroyed the invader,
And see Them become a Cutie Mark Crusader,

Long live our Equine Motherland,
Long live our Empire so Grand,
Long live Equestria united and Free,
Strong in our Friendship Trialed by Fire
Long may that Violet flag Inspire,
Shining new glory for Ponies to see

...Is it bad that I immediately knew what the song was?

Because Rarity is cutest when she is all frazzled, have some more of her secret dossier:

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She's going to kill me! Take the pictures and run!

All the Rarity pictures in this thread - awww

Twilight RP:

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Oh I have my sources, my dear niece... You'll just have to figure that out for yourself. You're a smart girl. Now, back in the box with those.

[to herself] Pffft, like she can do that even given all the evidence plainly before her nose

*Midnight's eyes widen, as she realizes something. "Wait a second...of course! Your 'source' was Spike, wasn't it?! That little fink, he must have seen me hide them, and babbled it to you!"

[facehoof heard from the other room] See? Toldya

*Midnight trails off for a moment, and then lets out a sigh.

"You know, this is exactly why I built that little shelter for myself that doesn't have any windows!"

[to herself] ...You mean, one that one can break into and not be seen from outside, giving ample time to... Exercise parental control, shall we say?

Oh youth... Somehow I doubt that new hiding place shall be a secret to me for very long at all. *She glances to her horseshoe box* Apparently it is time for me to move my collection as well. Now how in the name of Celstia herself did that filly find it?

Somewhere in the distance, some could say they heard a girlish giggle, ringing throughout the night.

Hehe.

[mutters] Gee, Rarity, you though I won't keep the playing field even for all interested sides?

Especially seeing that way I get to keep all the copies of the photos for myself.

Anyway, my work here is done [throws smoke bomb to cover tactical retreat] :P

[Gadora]

Well, I did promise this, so I'm gonna follow through, even though it's currently in 'rough copy' mode, and will be worked on over the next few days by myself and others to get it in really good condition, so any editing advice from here would be nice, too:

Midnight and Shimmer's Guide to Dating (Rough Copy):

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1.../edit?hl=en_US

I hope that ponies enjoy it! And now I am off to bed.

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It was a fun read, but there's one thing in particular that's bugging me. Midnight needed to go to Rarity's to get the dress and three hours of help with putting on the dress, yes?

How is it that, in three hours, the subject of why Midnight wanted the dress never came up? Or did Rarity think that the book's advice sounded sound?

[Strife Warzeal]

My brother is definitely ignorant and a bit of a bigot, small story as follows:

So I recently made a full set of pocket poniesand until school starts, I'm going to be putting them in my notebooks and the like, I had a few of them sitting in unused parts of my keyboard. I had fluttershy and rarity sitting in f1-f4, David Tennant Doctor Whoof and Ditzy sitting in f7-f8 and f9-f10 respectively, with the Great and Powerful Trixie sitting over printscreen. So he comes up into my room and after talking for ~10 minutes he finally notices the ponies sitting in my keyboard, and I guess freaks out is the best word, over the fact I have ponies on my keyboard. I honestly don't care what he thinks, but I thought it was a bit immature of him to react like that and leave before I could give the arguments on why people watch it. My brother is in his low 20s(and I'm 16 if it matters) if anyone cares and put this into any kind of perspective.

People don't share it that often on others' hissy fits over [you] liking ponies so I thought I would. Anyone else deal with things like this?

[Metahuman1]

My mother has thus far not gotten her head around the idea, nor has an old freind who is an ex I broke up with on good terms with years ago.

I just tell everyone I'm in it for the combination slapstick and Innuendo biased Dialog. (Hey look guys, the Punch has been SPIKED! from the ep Owls Well that Ends Well is my go too for this purpose, becuase so far no one I've hit with that has been able to deny that mental image!)

But I have had some people give me some "What the hell, who are you and what have you done with the real person I've known forever?!" looks.

[Titanium Fox]

*Postcard arrives at Rarity's five minutes later, dated last week, from the Island Paradise of Hanahoofhoof, with a general sentiment that he's gonna be gone a round trip of a month and wishes she was there.

Thus giving him an alibi for the pictures.*

*She just sighs, filing away the post card in a small drawer underneath the writing desk in her room on the second floor.*

*ponyard still collapsed on the floor looks up* Hey Rarity, my companion would like to know if that stallion that sneaks in here every other night is SUPPOSED to be here, or if he is perhaps the source of the pictures you DIDN'T take.

You have five seconds. Five. *A pair of almost comically long sewing needles float into the air, bathed in a pale, almost blue light.* Four. *They slowly begin to approach the pony on the floor.*

I'd argue that there's a difference between a goofy impromptu thing that is over and done in about 30-40 posts, based around actual pony content (pictures), and the 10+ page epics that the previous threads have contained, though.

Agreed. This was two pages, extremely impromptu, and there was no intention for it to last longer than well... Now. I'm just wrapping up the last few loose ends from when I went off to dinner. It's not like it distracted from anything, and heck. It sped up the thread a little, which is never a bad thing.

So just wanted to drop by to Announce my upcoming sequel to Fillystata, entitled "Mare in the Mirror". First chapter should be up in a day or two I hope.

I can't wait to read it when it's done!

Well, I'm afraid Ima have to say goodbye for this weekend. Weekend retreat with like NO service. See yall later!

Have fun this weekend! Try not to get swept away by the hurricane!

[size="1"]I'm actually going to the beach to watch the hurricane come in. Is anypony else this crazy?

Finished revisions on Blue Moon in a Red Sky. Now no longer in a browser-breakingly huge document! Hopefully, I made things a bit more interesting than forty pages of exposition. As always, reviews are welcome- and encouraged! Be sure to PM me your thoughts, even if it is just a TL;DR.

Anyway, here's the links.
Blue Moon in a Red Sky (Still a Working Title) [Crossover][Dark][Adventure?][Also tons of OCs]
Chapter 1
Chapter 2
Chapter 3
Chapter 4
Thanks in advance.

Another fanfic added to my (admittedly massive) list to read.

On that note, I'm also working on a project to convert all fanfics on EqD with the "completed" tag to PDF and maintain the database of them for my fellow kindle users. Before I go pony-wild on this though, I figure I'll just get a quick interest check. Is this a resource that anypony would utilize?

My brother is definitely ignorant and a bit of a bigot, small story as follows:

So I recently made a full set of pocket poniesand until school starts, I'm going to be putting them in my notebooks and the like, I had a few of them sitting in unused parts of my keyboard. I had fluttershy and rarity sitting in f1-f4, David Tennant Doctor Whoof and Ditzy sitting in f7-f8 and f9-f10 respectively, with the Great and Powerful Trixie sitting over printscreen. So he comes up into my room and after talking for ~10 minutes he finally notices the ponies sitting in my keyboard, and I guess freaks out is the best word, over the fact I have ponies on my keyboard. I honestly don't care what he thinks, but I thought it was a bit immature of him to react like that and leave before I could give the arguments on why people watch it. My brother is in his low 20s if anyone cares and put this into any kind of perspective.

People don't share it that often on others' hissy fits over [you] liking ponies so I thought I would. Anyone else deal with things like this?

Why yes I have actually! I have two roomates, and one just moved in today, three months after signing the lease. He moves in (we're sharing the master bedroom) and notices Twilight and Applejack on my iHome. He says some very unsavory things I can not repeat due to offensive terminology regarding my sexuality, my... sexual fetishes, my level of intelligence, and the same subjects of my friends who watched the show at my convincing and found it to be of quality as well.

Yes, he meant it mostly in jest. No, I wasn't offended. However, I was more than annoyed. I can only imagine what my brother would say if he ever found out. I grew up on a farm, and Ray is the most redneck drunkard person I know. He would probably beat me senseless.

I wish you the best of luck in dealing with your brother. I'm sure he'll cool it eventually, and you'll be able to actually get a word in edgewise after a day or so.

[Thanqol]

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Hmn. You might be right about the structure, it is pretty close to that as it is already, pulling the trigger and going all the way with it might be an idea way going about that...

So you think I should be more savage to the book itself? I suppose I could add to that, I just need to think of how to go about it, part of the reason why I went with date is because it's pretty snappy, so I'll think on it.

And I do mention it off-hand, maybe I should emphasize it more.

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Formal chapters might result in some quite short chapters. This is okay because feeling the need to strengthen each chapter would help with that pacing thing I mentioned earlier; making each a resilient, self-contained apocalypse works structurally in my mind.

And sure, it sounds snappy and it works in the moment, but when thinking about it, it starts to fray a bit at the seams. The book could have been written yesterday and still be just as terrible. There was never a time when that advice was useful . One way to do it is make it written by Blueblood.

My brother is definitely ignorant and a bit of a bigot, small story as follows:

People don't share it that often on others' hissy fits over [you] liking ponies so I thought I would. Anyone else deal with things like this?

The following quote has been applied to me in the past:

"Going completely crazy and descending into cartoonish super-villainy was pretty much the most logical way for his character arc to end really."

It has since been amended "Into cartoonish ponies". So no, people pretty much saw that one coming where I was concerned.

[MCerberus]

So, we accepted Photo Finish = RD when I wasn't looking?

I was more thinking that one Octavia Pie was playing at the Gala before her sister interrupted.

ninja edit- and yah, I'm just too lazy to edit my usual page 1 spiel.

[TheAmishPirate]

My brother is definitely ignorant and a bit of a bigot, small story as follows:

People don't share it that often on others' hissy fits over [you] liking ponies so I thought I would. Anyone else deal with things like this?

Not really, but then again, I've done a good job of hiding it. I imagine some people in my life would give me a lot of grief for it, and others would probably have a reaction similar to your brother's. Others would see it as perfectly in line with my character, so it really depends on who I told.

Sorry to hear your brother hasn't been too accepting. Give him some time, hopefully things will work out/I'll be praying about it.

[Rebelhero]

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You have five seconds. Five. *A pair of almost comically long sewing needles float into the air, bathed in a pale, almost blue light.* Four. *They slowly begin to approach the pony on the floor.*

*Ponyard scrambles to his hooves* Err.... im not into Kama sutra... I MEAN ACUPUNCTURE, ACUPUNCTURE... Oh buck. *ponyard stammers* I-I know a spell to keep out peepers! as-as well as hide anything you need! *he moves toward the window.*

[Titanium Fox]

*Ponyard scrambles to his hooves* Err.... im not into Kama sutra... I MEAN ACUPUNCTURE, ACUPUNCTURE... Oh buck. *ponyard stammers* I-I know a spell to keep out peepers! as-as well as hide anything you need! *he moves toward the window.*

THREE... *She begins to advance, only a few short feet behind the needles, finessing them just so as to force them to glint in the soft lights adorning her boutique; the streak of reflected light traveling from the base of the needle straight down its length, accentuating and pronouncing just how sharp it truly was. TWO... *Her weapons of choice now slid back just barely an inch, rotating so that the tips of the massive implements now pointed at the offending stallion.

So, does everypony else still this this is well within character for her? I know I do, but then again I'm not the one I'm writing this for.

It is too much fun to write out detail oriented forms of intimidation.

[Gamerlord]

I just realized something...
Discord escapes from a stone prison.
Pinkie's family manages a rock farm. Stones are rocks.
Pinkie's family- Dull,humorless, rock farmers, or secret guardians of the prison of Discord?

[Kurgan]

Why?

It comes down to possessiveness. In the original excerpt (spoilered for those who haven't read it yet):

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The Ursa roared, but Midnight’s horn flared to light. Much akin to her azure mother, vines and roots began to pull up around her, starting to lash around the beasts limbs!

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We are talking about the limbs attached to the beast.

The original "beasts limbs" are two disconnected words, just two plural nouns sitting next to each other. It could be talking about dozens of creatures and their limbs, or just one (though admittedly the context tells us just one). Theoretically, since there is no connector there at all saying that the limbs belong to the beast, we cannot even be sure of that.

Changing it to "beast's" marks it as possessive, it is saying that the limbs in this statement belong to the beast, without using that many words to describe the relationship. It also marks that it is a single beast being talked about.

If it were instead "beasts' ", it would be saying that there are several beasts, and the limbs belong to all of them.