My Little Pony LII: 525.600 Ponies!

[SiuiS]

Here you go ponies

Discord!!!

Prodigious!

[Soras Teva Gee]

...am i high?

What.

No seriously, what.

Pfft,

Light. Weights.

Heck I've even watched the animated version of Cupcakes. Which I won't link you because it pushes SFW to the limits.

But if you really wanna know madness try HARD. MODE.

[Pokonic]

Ah! So now we see the plot that began the relationship between the shakey young colt and the innocent loving princess.

"...haha, triple entendre!"





I don't recall seeing such such a conversation if it happened, but since I was also looking up something in the Elder Scrolls game history, I'm now thinking of Equestria being a realm of Oblivion. >_>
Hmmm, Celestia as a daedra prince...

...am i high?

No, silly, your Pinkie Pie!


Anyway, I just found a picture of these strangly adorable donkey-things. That apperently have naturaly shortish legs.

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[Colonel Fedora]

A CLEAR CHALLENGE TO FIND THE WEIRDEST PONY STUFF

PONPONPONY

PONY YOUTUBE POOP

A YTPMV FOR A BREAK

This one was on EQD so it doesn't really count.

ANOTHER LOVELY YOUTUBE POOP

AND THE PIECE DE RESISTANCE, THE GRAND GALLOPING COLLAB

*Breathes heavily*

Now hopefully none of you will challenge my ability to find weird things on the internet ever again.

For all our sakes.

[thubby]

*sees thubby unconcious BSOD*
and you creatures wonder why I get to do as i please.

[Soras Teva Gee]

*Breathes heavily*

Now hopefully none of you will challenge my ability to find weird things on the internet ever again.

For all our sakes.

I believe Ponymotes will illuminate the situation. You see you posted this:



or even this:



Which is all well and good. However it is not this:

[Anarion]

Pfft,

Light. Weights.

Heck I've even watched the animated version of Cupcakes. Which I won't link you because it pushes SFW to the limits.

But if you really wanna know madness try HARD. MODE.

Your hard mode links were already marked as clicked for me from the last time we went through this layer of madness. Needs new material imo.

[PhantomFox]

Okay... my Pinkie avatar has disappeared apparently. It needed replacing anyhow. Any suggestions for what I should request for a new ponytaur? Probably something appropriately foxy, or based on Deep Forest. Thoughts?

[Soras Teva Gee]

Your hard mode links were already marked as clicked for me from the last time we went through this layer of madness. Needs new material imo.

I think that was at least something of my point now wasn't it?

If you can find something more soul flaying... well I won't say be my guest because I'm not exactly in any hurry to further into the Outer Darkness myself.

[Topaz]

PhoeKun's avatar? I don't have any I am afraid.

Oh, really?

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[SiuiS]

Oh, really?

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That's a terrible picture! I have... What do you call those things...

Aha! Standards! I have standards.
Although I'd forgotten that one, and in the others all toucan really make out are the ropes...

[Nameless]

Here you go ponies

Discord!!!

That was beautiful.

Trixie is a banana.

Embrace the madness.

That was even more beautiful. ;_;

[Beacon of Chaos]

Here you go ponies

Discord!!!

My face when:

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[SiuiS]

I'm getting flabby, so I decided to exercise a bit. And my phone was right there, so why not use the Hush Now Quiet Now sound clip for just such an occasion? So I did.

I was able to make it through five repetitions before my form gave up and I collapsed. Sweetie, you're cute and all, but your cheerfulness belies my pain @_@

When my heart stops pounding (probably tomorrow) I'll do actual exercise routine getting so torn up over maybe two hundred crunches? Pretty sad. I wonder though, has anyone applied pony to personal fitness?

[Deadly]

Deadly, from the sounds of it the eqD pretender is just a dingus.

Nah, they were quite polite and did praise the story itself. It's just that some of them (but not all, apparently) are very keen on punctuation and style.

It's tedious and frustrating to have to fix, I'd much rather spend my time writing the next chapter, or one of my other stories, but on the other hand I do want to get better and if these things were second nature to me I would probably be a better writer and wouldn't be in this situation as much.

And besides, some of these trivial little things can be used intentionally to convey subtle meanings or to create a style of your own. If I ever wanted to write a story full of intentional comma splices I'd need to be aware of comma splices in the first place.

It's annoying, but I really shouldn't complain.

[BlasTech]

Thubby, we are all on drugs. :/

WINNING!!!

[DigoDragon]

[COLOR="DarkRed"]Let's be honest, though, when something results in a Pinkie Pie Dance Fight, everypony wins.

I cannot not agree with that.
Anypony here read/watch West Side Story? Imagine Ponies and Griffons instead of Jets n Sharks. That would be cool... geez I need to write all these ideas down.
I'm sitting on a gold mine.

Oh this could work too. Although Celestia would need to be a Daedra princess, of course. But the power level seems pretty close to correct, with Discord being a more crazy Daedra like Sheogorrath.

Okay, if free time was something I could gain this weekend (maybe), I should totally create a Skyrim mod that adds a Sheogorrath copy with Discord's voice as a potential follower. XD Maybe give him the Storm Call shout at higher levels. That ability is pretty random.

Naw, Discord is the prince, Celestia is one of those opposite creatures that rarly show up in the games.

You mean an Aedra? Heh, I could see that. Celestia as one of the 9 divines.

[DigoDragon]

Sabine- (That mane... never again) http://asdflove.deviantart.com/art/P...bine-325531589

If you're still looking for an alternate cutie mark, how about a black heart with fangs?

You know, if a pony who didn't happen to be wearing a hat made that statement, it would have a bit more merit.

"My hat ain't no clothes, its a Personal Effect!"

Probably something appropriately foxy, or based on Deep Forest. Thoughts?

Deep Forest? Isn't that a music album?
**Digs through his personal collection**

*Breathes heavily*
Now hopefully none of you will challenge my ability to find weird things on the internet ever again.
For all our sakes.

No more coffee for you today.

[SlyGuyMcFly]

I cannot not agree with that.
Anypony here read/watch West Side Story? Imagine Ponies and Griffons instead of Jets n Sharks. That would be cool... geez I need to write all these ideas down.
I'm sitting on a gold mine.

Quick! Somepony fund this!

[One Tin Soldier]

I cannot not agree with that.
Anypony here read/watch West Side Story? Imagine Ponies and Griffons instead of Jets n Sharks. That would be cool... geez I need to write all these ideas down.
I'm sitting on a gold mine.

All I can think is a gang of ponies walking and shaking a single hoof, which inexplicably makes the sound of snapping fingers.

[Soras Teva Gee]

No more coffee for you today.

Well that was technically yesterday.

[Kd7sov]

All I can think is a gang of ponies walking and shaking a single hoof, which inexplicably makes the sound of snapping fingers.

Hmm. Tap the side of one pony's hoof against the side of somepony else's? Think that'd work for the sound?

[Kindablue]

Nah, they were quite polite and did praise the story itself. It's just that some of them (but not all, apparently) are very keen on punctuation and style.

It's tedious and frustrating to have to fix, I'd much rather spend my time writing the next chapter, or one of my other stories, but on the other hand I do want to get better and if these things were second nature to me I would probably be a better writer and wouldn't be in this situation as much.

And besides, some of these trivial little things can be used intentionally to convey subtle meanings or to create a style of your own. If I ever wanted to write a story full of intentional comma splices I'd need to be aware of comma splices in the first place.

It's annoying, but I really shouldn't complain.

That's a good way to approach it.

Deep Forest? Isn't that a music album?
**Digs through his personal collection**

His webcomic, which is luckily not titled Thick Wood. That would be terrible.

[Alabenson]

Hmm. Tap the side of one pony's hoof against the side of somepony else's? Think that'd work for the sound?

I think I've seen ponies flick their tails to produce a "snap" sound.

If I'm not mistaken, Rainbow Dash does so when she tells Applebloom that she can get her a Cutie Mark "like that!" during Call of the Cutie.

[Soras Teva Gee]

I think I've seen ponies flick their tails to produce a "snap" sound.

A whip snap is not a finger snap... but that would be the best we could get.

Or just do an obvious musical riff with the snapping beat apparent but no actual snapping on screen

[One Tin Soldier]

Hmm. Tap the side of one pony's hoof against the side of somepony else's? Think that'd work for the sound?

Maybe. I think it would be funnier it didn't make sense, though.

[PhantomFox]

Deep Forest? Isn't that a music album?
**Digs through his personal collection**

*points at sig*

[DigoDragon]

Well that was technically yesterday.

Oh. Uh... well then no coffee for 'em tomorrow.

His webcomic, which is luckily not titled Thick Wood. That would be terrible.

*points at sig*

Oh. (The "Oh"s have been doubled!). Well I guess I should be glad that's just a webcomic and not a Pinkie ninja huh? Anyway, I DID find my Deep Forest album, so at least I'm not obviously crazy.

Okay, off to go clean my work monitor from the resulting spittake I had after Kindablue's comment, and then I got a webcomic to read.

[Tectonic Robot]

I think I've seen ponies flick their tails to produce a "snap" sound.

If I'm not mistaken, Rainbow Dash does so when she tells Applebloom that she can get her a Cutie Mark "like that!" during Call of the Cutie.

Remember Fluttershy's nose-boop-tail-thwip thing? That was kinda snappy. ^^

[Deadly]

No one got time to look at my story?

I still have no idea what that first point below is even about. What's so obnoxious about my descriptors? What descriptors?

Grammar Nazis needed

So I sent my story II off to EqD. I seem to get all the very strict prereaders who like to focus on punctuation and such other issues. It's so tedious

So I need help combing through the story. Any help would be greatly appreciated.

Below are some specific issues I got in response, along with my own comments.

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You’ve a serious issue with obnoxiously stacked descriptors in your opening pages.

What what? Anyone able to point out what "obnoxiously stacked descriptors" this might be refering to?

Comma splices. This is a pretty chronic issue, and you’ve really got to address it.

Ah! Comma splices! Please! Please! Please look for these especially! Comb every line! Let's remove every comma and replace it with full stops! Death to all sentences longer than 10 words!

Kidding, or course, but do look for them. Comma splices annoy me because worrying about them makes me remove lots of probably perfectly acceptable commas and replace them with full stops, resulting in very short lines and a story that reads in parts as if it was written for small children.

Worrying about these damn trivialities of punctuation really cramps my writing and turns it from something fluid and creative into a boring drudgery.

This is why there are editors, dammit![/rant!]

Italicize direct thoughts.

I'll be looking for these myself too, but if you notice any direct thoughts that aren't properly italicized or something, do let me know.

of the living,” he said while working

Missing comma. This is something of a chronic issue for you.

I can not for the life of me find any missing comma there. Anyone care to illuminate me?

It was breathtaking.

You really want to be careful with casual narration. You’re writing from 3rd person omniscient here, and so want to say objective unless directly relaying a character perspective. Be aware of the line as you carry on.

I have no idea what that comment is trying to tell me. I wasn't aware that I was writing omniscient, as far as I'm aware everything so far has been strictly limited to Dash's perspective, only those things she knows or can observe. This particular case is definitely not omniscient, it's just Dash' personal opinion. I mean, 'It was breathtaking' isn't something you need to be omniscient to think.

Am I missing something there?