Potential T-shirt Design

[pclips]

We're appreciating the feedback in the Merchandise thread. Consensus seems to be forming around a "When life gives you crap" design and I will be working on that, and some other potential ones. But I had this design idea this weekend and I like it because it can be done in 3 colors on a black shirt. Dunno, what do you guys think of it?

[Cobra_Ikari]

*grins*

...I hadn't even thought of that. I like it. :)

[SteveMB]

That looks neat.

[Strengfellow]

Oh my, now that does look good.

[pclips]

Alternatives include ditching the phrase below it, or this simplified phrase which a couple of my friends said was too slogan-y:

[SteveMB]

Alternatives include ditching the phrase below it, or this simplified phrase which a couple of my friends said was too slogan-y:

I have a slight preference for the shorter version (for t-shirts, I would think that "slogan-y" is a good thing), but either one works. (I don't think it works as well if the tagline is deleted altogether.)

[Pepz]

don't really like this as a t-shirt tbh, think it would look better as a poster ;) just my 2cp :)

[Erk]

I like it, I think a version with and without the slogan would be nice.

And what about "It's the plot that counts"?

[Scientivore]

Assuming that the smaller image shown against a shirt background is an indication of how it might look from a distance, it might be better to leave the slogan on the bottom solid. If you don't want the shorter slogan to overpower the title on top then you could make the letters the same size as the longer version and spaced out like the title.

At least, on my monitor, the slogan on the first shirt is clearly more legible than the slogan on the other.

[Estelindis]

I like the new, shorter slogan better: it's catchier than the original. Love the design - it may not be clear to people who don't read the comic that the bright light is a teleportation - oops, moveamancy (move-'em-ancy?) - effect, but that does have the advantage of prompting conversations of explanation.

[SteveMB]

I like it, I think a version with and without the slogan would be nice.

And what about "It's the plot that counts"?

That would lose the pun on "drags you in" (the scene shows Parson being literally "dragged in").

Assuming that the smaller image shown against a shirt background is an indication of how it might look from a distance, it might be better to leave the slogan on the bottom solid. If you don't want the shorter slogan to overpower the title on top then you could make the letters the same size as the longer version and spaced out like the title.

At least, on my monitor, the slogan on the first shirt is clearly more legible than the slogan on the other.

I agree; the solid lettering would work better at a distance.

[Neofite]

I love it!! The shorter slogan works better.

[Bounty]

That would lose the pun on "drags you in" (the scene shows Parson being literally "dragged in").

I was actually thinking it should go the other way.

Shorten the slogan to " ... IT DRAGS YOU IN!"

The repitition of the word plot seems to slow it down to me.

[armatil]

imo it would be best if there'd be no slogan, and the "erfworld" be written below the art. nice, plain and simple (i'm one of those "less is more"people).

if there needs to be a slogan, i must say Bounty has a good point.

either way, the concept is cool. the graphic suits shirting well.

[Rue]

I liked it best with no slogan at all too. Or the " ... IT DRAGS YOU IN!", though I think I liked the idea of it just saying Erfworld underneath more then any of the phrases at all.

[Cobra_Ikari]

I was actually thinking it should go the other way.

Shorten the slogan to " ... IT DRAGS YOU IN!"

The repitition of the word plot seems to slow it down to me.

I think you've made a good point.

[Mr Teufel]

Yeah, no need to repeat "Plot". IMHO.

[Tephlon]

I agree on the "...it drags you in"

I would take another look at the image though, maybe with a professional screenprinter, to see if you could do some halftones, to soften those edges in the light blue/dark blue. Right now it kind of looks like it was done in MSpaint. And that is a shame for Jami's artwork.

[kansas_dave]

Alternatives include ditching the phrase below it, or this simplified phrase which a couple of my friends said was too slogan-y:

I'd be interested if there were no text at the bottom.

[Thomar_of_Uointer]

You know, a t-shirt with just the "PLOT" on it would be pretty cool. However, the slogan completes it. Both say different things, but I like the first one better. Also fun would be Hamstard plus pizza stains.

[Scientivore]

I hope this doesn't seem presumptuous. I'm working on learning Photoshop Elements 5.0 right now and it seemed like good practice. I tried it with the ellipsis first and I didn't like the way it looked. It's in a spoiler tag because it's over 400 pixels wide.

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[Sisqui]

Shorten the slogan to " ... IT DRAGS YOU IN!"

The repitition of the word plot seems to slow it down to me.

Ditto. The sound of it the way it is on the shirt now is just a little bit awkward.

[pclips]

Hm. Well then how about dropping the "It" and the excamation point too?

[Thomar_of_Uointer]

Hm. Well then how about dropping the "It" and the excamation point too?

But then it doesn't make sense to people that haven't read it...

[SteveMB]

But then it doesn't make sense to people that haven't read it...

How so? It reads either "ERFWORLD DRAGS YOU IN" or "ERFWORLD PLOT DRAGS YOU IN" (depending on whether or not it clicks in the reader's brain that the "PLOT" sound effect is actually a word in the T-shirt slogan) -- either one works as a statement in telegraphic/headline style English.

[Scientivore]

Hm. Well then how about dropping the "It" and the excamation point too?

This really is good practice for me so I made a few more versions, without the exclamation point this time. Hope you don't mind!

It Drags You In

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...Drags You In

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Personally, I think that I like the last one the best.

[pclips]

Yeah I have to agree. I like that last one.

[Maerad of Pellinor]

I'd like it better if either there were no slogan at the bottom or if the slogan were an Erfworld pun....

What if it said "Make crap golems" at the bottom? It wouldn't make any sense to anyone who hasn't read the comic, but I kind of think that's the point with shirts like these....

[Scientivore]

Here's a sloganless version for you. Rebalancing it was more work than I was willing to do since I don't like it as much.

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Also, sorry for making everyone load the other images again; with this one I had so many that I moved them all to a sub-album and renamed them.

[ChimericPhase]

This really is good practice for me so I made a few more versions, without the exclamation point this time. Hope you don't mind!

It Drags You In

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...Drags You In

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Drags You In

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Personally, I think that I like the last one the best.

I personally don't like the last one. Without the punctuation, it reads very choppy. Nothing draws all three elements together. The elipses help because they tell the reader that the last line is a continuation of the earlier words (whether it's Erfworld or Plot, it doesnt really matter). It pulls all of it together.


The first one works nice too because while the lines stand alone and yet compliment each other by use of an actual pronoun instead of an implied pronoun. And personally, the first would be my choice of a design.