Results 1 to 30 of 152
-
2009-12-31, 03:54 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Oct 2007
- Location
- Chicago, IL
- Gender
[DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
A branch from the infamous Snark Threads, we have been handed a challenge.
I'm making this both to organize things and to solicit input. Ultimately, Domochevsky decides what the final product looks like, but hopefully this'll make life easier for everyone involved.
NOTE: For length, Domo's talking about comics in this style:
Part 1
Part 2
So keep that in mind while pacing the Script Slay
* * *
Even though Domochevsky has them in his sig, here are links to the Unsuckenings thus far:
Part 1
Part 2
Part 3
Part 4
Part 5
Part 6Last edited by Oracle_Hunter; 2010-05-19 at 04:31 PM.
Lead Designer for Oracle Hunter GamesToday a Blog, Tomorrow a Business!
~ Awesome Avatar by the phantastic Phase ~Spoiler
Elflad
-
2009-12-31, 04:13 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Feb 2009
- Location
- Germany (North)
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
Oh snap... now it's on, isn't it. >_>
Bring it!
As said in the other thread, i have this faint clue that the Dominus and Luna won't be involved in this arc, since... yeah, they have no reason to be there. At all.
-
2009-12-31, 04:43 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Oct 2007
- Location
- Chicago, IL
- Gender
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
PART 1 - January 2009 (Material from here to here)
Spoiler(1)
Dominic & Luna are looking at the Crone's runes like here (Panel 7)
Luna: So what do they mean?
Dominic: I have no ideas. They're really obscure.
(2)
Luna: They look Orcish, maybe we should ask Melna?
Dominic: Why? She's not a Deegan.
Luna: I know, but she's right over there.
(3)
Melna glowering in a corner
(4)
Melna walks over, grabs the page
Melna: Where did you get this?
Dominic: Things were getting slow around here, so I had a Plot Vision (tm).
Melna: The Crone of Maltak showed me these runes last night in a dream. I need to go to fulfill my destiny.
(5)
Dominic's face like Panel 3 but far more grotesque.
Dominic: Did you say Destiny!?!
(6)
Melna: Yes, my destiny. I was apprenticed to the Crone as a youth - I know her ways. It has become time to save Maltak...
Luna: Ewwww
(7)
A dead horse drops on Luna
(8)
Melna looks pained
(9)
Melna: To rescue Maltak from a curse left over from the Stupid War.
Dominic: Don't you mean The War of Callanian Aggression?
(10)
Melna punches Dominic in the face
(11)
Dominic: What was that for?
Melna shrugs
(12)
Dominic: Well, it's short notice, but I'm sure I can be ready to leave in a moment.
Melna: Wait, why are you going?
Dominic: Why wouldn't I?
Melna: To start with...
(13)
Dominic looking extra frail
"One: You're a scrawny nerd"
(14)
Outrage Chief looking outraged
"Two: Orcs hate Callanians"
(15)
Melna ticking off numbers on one hand
Melna: And three - this is my destiny. Not everything is about you.
(16)
Whiny Dominic
Dominic: But Melna... this is my comic!
(17)
Melna punches Dominic in the face
(18)
Dominic: Owww.... well, at least take some other pawns... I mean people - along.
(19)
Glamor-shot of shirtless Donovan
"Orcs like my dad"
(20)
Spark hanging upside down from the top of the panel - Dominic & Melna look shocked
Spark: And bring me and Hansi! We're comedy gold!
(21)
Luna crawling out from underneath the dead horse
Luna: And me. I never get to do anything important.
(22)
Dominic tips the horse back on Luna. Luna lets out a squeak
Dominic: Not now, dear - grown-ups are talking.
(23)
Melna: Fine, I'll take your stupid cat and idiot father just to make you shut up. Hell, maybe Hansi will even be useful.
(24)
Dominic: Great! I'll just wait here until you all fail and ride to the rescue then.
(25)
Melna knees Dominic in the balls...
(26)
...and drop-kicks him through a window
(27)
Melna looks at the paper again
Melna: That felt good.
Luna: Say, what does that mean anyways?
(28)
Full page of the runes
"The Five Clans must become the First People and Dance as One in the shadow of the First Mountain"
(29)
Luna: What does that mean? It's soooo confusing!
(30)
Enraged Melna boots Luna backwards, causing her to trip over the dead horse, collapsing
(31)
Hansi reading over Melna's shoulder
Hansi: I dunno, it looks like a lady's naughty parts to me.
Melna looking irritated
Domo - is this the kind of format you're looking for?
Author's Commentary
SpoilerI plan on relegating Luna & Dominic to the margins, but not out of the comic entirely. Dominic will show up and constantly try to horn in on the plot (and will get abused by other characters) while Luna will stumble around saying stupid/Mookie-ish things, only to be punished (rather than rewarded) by the Forces of the Universe.Last edited by Oracle_Hunter; 2009-12-31 at 04:44 PM.
Lead Designer for Oracle Hunter GamesToday a Blog, Tomorrow a Business!
~ Awesome Avatar by the phantastic Phase ~Spoiler
Elflad
-
2009-12-31, 05:01 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Feb 2009
- Location
- Germany (North)
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
Hmyeah, that looks pretty good.
I'll probably make a few adjustments here and there if it seems fitting but overall i can work with that.
Spoiler
Incidentally, the first entry point of the horse is bothering me. It has to come from somewhere. Maybe it falls out of a dusty closet labeled "for later use" or something? Or maybe when she says it there's a crashing sound and the horse falls out of one of those "break when emergency" cases, possibly with Dominic or even Luna standing next to/under it with a hammer.
Last edited by Domochevsky; 2009-12-31 at 05:02 PM.
-
2009-12-31, 05:40 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Oct 2007
- Location
- Chicago, IL
- Gender
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
Lead Designer for Oracle Hunter GamesToday a Blog, Tomorrow a Business!
~ Awesome Avatar by the phantastic Phase ~Spoiler
Elflad
-
2009-12-31, 08:09 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Jun 2009
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
Spoiler
Thanks, SnowballMan!
-
2009-12-31, 08:45 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Feb 2009
- Location
- Germany (North)
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
Spoiler
Hum... i don't think it would be a good idea to already include him in the first three panels. You also can't groinpunch something that isn't humanoid. (He would have to do a uppercut from underneath the (still living) horse.)
Most importantly: Groinpunching only for those who deserve it. >_>
-
2009-12-31, 08:52 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Sep 2009
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
SpoilerMake it a dead horse, and have it come back to life. It's symbolic and shows how awesome he is. Just be careful to have it be him and not her bringing it back to life - maybe have the horse's owner shaking hands with him in the background afterwards?
=Uncool-Last edited by uncool; 2009-12-31 at 08:54 PM.
-
2009-12-31, 08:56 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Oct 2007
- Location
- Chicago, IL
- Gender
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
Lead Designer for Oracle Hunter GamesToday a Blog, Tomorrow a Business!
~ Awesome Avatar by the phantastic Phase ~Spoiler
Elflad
-
2009-12-31, 09:13 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Sep 2009
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
SpoilerRunning gag? I mean, it just felt so right to have him reanimate it...
If so, put it as a running gag every time an overused meme gets used again. Groinpuncher, dead horse. Aardvark, dead horse. He-Dom, dead horse. Dead horse, dead horse. You get the idea.
=Uncool-
-
2009-12-31, 09:16 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Jul 2008
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
Are we actually rewriting Maltak or are we just doing a gigantic strip slay? Just curious. :P
-
2009-12-31, 09:17 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Sep 2009
-
2009-12-31, 09:20 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Feb 2009
- Location
- Germany (North)
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
Valid question. Please keep the memes to a absolute minimum, guys. As background gags here and there they're ok if they fit, but let's focus on plot progression.
Spoiler
That also means that there will be no groin punching, unless the Universe decides that this is a valid way to keep Dominic on the sideline. But remember: Stuff does not suddenly appear. Instead it gets redirected towards the main characters.
So for example if Groinpuncher should appear at some point to nut Dominic then some introductory background info like "Ah, Maltak. A good day and place for my spontaneous vacation!" from him right before that is in order.
Last edited by Domochevsky; 2009-12-31 at 09:23 PM.
-
2009-12-31, 09:21 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Jul 2008
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
Just for fun, can we pretend all the main characters don't suck?
-
2009-12-31, 09:23 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Feb 2009
- Location
- Germany (North)
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
That depends on you people making the script.
-
2009-12-31, 09:25 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Oct 2007
- Location
- Chicago, IL
- Gender
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
Ah, you want to keep the wackiness down to a minimum?
I'll keep that in mind for the next installment.
Actually: my first post - too wacky, insufficiently wacky, or Just Right?
EDIT:
SpoilerMy current intention is make few of the characters suck.
Luna & Dom suck, for sure. But Melna is going to have some honest-to-god drama (mixed in with some comedic trauma), Hansi is going to be a Memetic Badass (and superb lov-ar), Spark will be zany - but all the Orcs will be played as good, dramatic characters.
I'm afraid I'll have to keep Pimp Jacob - it makes sense that all the Deegans seem somewhat unbalanced when viewed through the lens of realistic characters, no?Last edited by Oracle_Hunter; 2009-12-31 at 09:28 PM.
Lead Designer for Oracle Hunter GamesToday a Blog, Tomorrow a Business!
~ Awesome Avatar by the phantastic Phase ~Spoiler
Elflad
-
2009-12-31, 09:26 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Feb 2009
- Location
- Germany (North)
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
Last edited by Domochevsky; 2009-12-31 at 09:28 PM.
-
2010-01-01, 10:35 AM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Apr 2005
- Location
- Did you get to see Mos-
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
My request:
At some point if the Crone, or anybody is cooking, have Luna add Thyme to the mix, and have everybody be displeased with the result, complete with somebody muttering 'you added Thyme? Thyme changes everything'Spoiler
"Square root of 912.04 is 30.2. It all seemed harmless. Square root of 912.04 is 30.2. It all seemed harmless. Square root of 912.04 is 30.2..."
"It all seemed harmless..."
Character Roster:
Ami Nakamura - Self Taught Sorceress [Sacramento Occult]
-
2010-01-01, 10:41 AM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Jun 2006
- Location
- Poland
- Gender
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
Something must be done about the Orc War. Either a decent reason for it must be devised or the fact that Callanians attacked orcs pretty much because one of their high-ranking officers was a racist nutcase must be played for laughs.
Last edited by Morty; 2010-01-01 at 10:41 AM.
My FFRP characters. Avatar by Ashen Lilies. Sigatars by Ashen Lilies, Gullara and Purple Eagle.
Interested in the Nexus FFRP setting? See our Discord server.
-
2010-01-01, 04:19 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Jan 2007
- Gender
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
Spoiler
*Warlord Mustache arrives for a diplomatic meeting with Outrage Chief*
Donovan: "Outrage chief, Warlord Mustache is here to negotiate peace between Callian and Maltak. Now your both xenophobic racists, so i'm sure you'll have plenty to talk about."
Warlord Mustache: "Hello"
Outrage chief: "hey"
...
...
Warlord Mustache: "Nice haircut."
Outrage Chief: "Nice Boots."
*they grimace at each other*
*And thus began the great Orc war*
Last edited by slayerx; 2010-01-01 at 04:51 PM.
-
2010-01-03, 07:40 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Feb 2009
- Location
- Germany (North)
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
Alright, part 1 has been done and can now be found here.
-
2010-01-03, 07:56 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Dec 2004
- Location
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
Spark looks like a cat. For some reason, it makes him impossible to recognize.
Hark! An avatar drawn by Kate Beaton!
-
2010-01-03, 09:06 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Jul 2007
-
2010-01-03, 09:38 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Jan 2006
- Gender
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
That Luna is actually likeable?! What have you done?! improper interrogation marks and exclamation marks cortesy of the author we love to hate
The only random part on that was the horse coming from the closet. Maybe on the next comic we can make Luna asking Dominic why they keep a dead horse in the closet?
-
2010-01-03, 09:50 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Oct 2007
- Location
- Australia
- Gender
-
2010-01-03, 10:20 PM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Sep 2006
- Location
- The Lair of Gaming (basem
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
That was.... really good. I like how the snark remains prominent, but doesn't detract from the plot momentum itself. I look forward to reading this.
I wish I had something to put here in this empty space....
www.ultimate-reviews.net Yeah. That's 'bout it....
-
2010-01-04, 03:35 AM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Sep 2008
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
Very nice!
I was going to post this, but it's really a more serious, dramatic take on Maltak. That was just a sketchy outline of the setup for the arc. Ultimately I wanted Dom and pals to be bystanders to the crucial events in the arc. And also for Dom to fall for Celesto's manipulation. But, yeah... not a lot of humor in this take,,, so, um.. nvm.
-
2010-01-04, 07:51 AM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Jun 2006
- Location
- Poland
- Gender
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
Last edited by Morty; 2010-01-04 at 07:51 AM.
My FFRP characters. Avatar by Ashen Lilies. Sigatars by Ashen Lilies, Gullara and Purple Eagle.
Interested in the Nexus FFRP setting? See our Discord server.
-
2010-01-04, 08:17 AM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Dec 2004
- Location
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
Hark! An avatar drawn by Kate Beaton!
-
2010-01-04, 09:02 AM (ISO 8601)
- Join Date
- Aug 2007
Re: [DD Snark]Maltak: The Unsuckening
And then it turns out that Callan has been using Maltak as a garbage dump for years as Dominic is unloaded right behind the border.
Oh no!