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Thread: The Favored
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2011-09-13, 10:24 PM (ISO 8601)
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The Favored
The Favored is a comic I'm doing in my free time between my work schedule and hectic things at home. It is planned to be a mix of sci-fi and fantasy to a degree, with things leaning further toward modern sci-fi (optimistically, 30-50 years in the future). I'm planning on updating at LEAST once per week, if not more often.
Without further ado, here it is!
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Last edited by Derjuin; 2011-10-12 at 01:54 AM.
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2011-09-14, 08:45 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: The Favored
Awesome first comic!
The art is decent, and the references abound. *cookie to those who get them.*
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2011-09-14, 09:36 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: The Favored
Aaargh my eyes
That red lettering on the grey wall is murder. Otherwise great comic.
I get no cookie.
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2011-09-15, 03:39 AM (ISO 8601)
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Re: The Favored
Yeah, nice start! Interested to see where it goes.
I'm a bit concerned about your text order. In the 7th panel, it looks like she's all "forget this" because she's not getting a reply. But she gets a reply before she's all "forget this", it looks like she actually interrupts them after they've been talking for a little while.
The same problem is in the next panel. It seems like she should be saying "Wait, what..." after she's told to watch her step, not before.
It might be that it's back to front because you're actually laying clues to future plot (why she might be disappointed to be welcomed, for example). If not, you should be more careful with your bubble placement!Last edited by Oppolo; 2011-09-15 at 03:40 AM.
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2011-09-15, 05:40 AM (ISO 8601)
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link to my comic look at spoiler -Update 30.4.13
if you did not understand my contribution - to the cursed Google Talk (and my inability to learn foreign languages)
Notice - if you lost PonyTars made by me, look here - >Spoilerhttp://s111.photobucket.com/albums/n159/Akrim13/PonyAvatars/#!cpZZ2QQtppZZ24
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2011-09-15, 11:47 AM (ISO 8601)
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Re: The Favored
Thanks
SEELEY cares not for your ophthalmological concerns! On a serious note, would a brighter red be better?
Thanks!
Bubble placement specifically for the 7th and 8th panels was an issue I tried to resolve before posting it - in the 7th, they're supposed to be speaking at about the same time, the voice from behind the door starting slightly before the character. It then passes to the 8th panel, where she says "...wait, what?" because she wasn't actually listening, having already been disappointed (thus the overlap in panel 7). It was really hard for me to actually illustrate this, and I bounced ideas back and forth between me and a friend for a while (an hour or three) on how better to do so.
However, further installments should have better bubble placement (unless it's meant to inspire confusion ).Last edited by Derjuin; 2011-09-15 at 11:52 AM.
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2011-09-15, 12:31 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: The Favored
Looks good.
when i first saw the thread title i thought: thats a nice title. probably a nice Fan comic too.
and then i saw little under it: Derjuin made it? oh this must be realy good!Despite everything, its still me.
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2011-09-16, 11:56 PM (ISO 8601)
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2011-09-17, 02:52 AM (ISO 8601)
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Re: The Favored
SEELEY CARES for your ophthalmological concerns!
SpoilerThe letters could've been adjusting to anyone entering's surname, though.The Pen is mightier than the Sword - when the message is written in Blood.
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2011-09-20, 03:39 AM (ISO 8601)
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Re: The Favored
New page is up!
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2011-09-20, 04:54 AM (ISO 8601)
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Re: The Favored
Great/neat comic. Of course.
This nepotism is really killing our society. Trained and educated super-soldiers can't get no job, but fifteen years old with important moms get enlisted for special projects. ;)The Pen is mightier than the Sword - when the message is written in Blood.
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2011-09-20, 09:49 AM (ISO 8601)
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Re: The Favored
I agree, my cousin is a cyber/chemically enhanced super soldier. He stands eight feet tall, he can outrun a motorcycle at a dead sprint, punch through concrete, and stand up to concentrated small arms fire without the assistance of special armor, but all he does is sit around at home controlling the TV with his mind because his spot on Raptor Team Seven was filled by a General's nephew.
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2011-09-22, 07:33 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: The Favored
Apologies, there might be a bit of a delay on the next one, sickness resembling the flu is killing me right now...
Well, she technically qualifies for the mysterious standards of the project's enlistment requirements...
Clearly he's the secret pawn of RT7 in Operation: Change the Channel without Grandpa Noticing.Last edited by Derjuin; 2011-09-22 at 07:34 PM.
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2011-09-25, 12:35 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: The Favored
Waiting ain't a problem. By the way, obligatory poor quality "get better soon" panel.
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...not to be delivered until you recover.The Pen is mightier than the Sword - when the message is written in Blood.
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2011-09-27, 01:55 AM (ISO 8601)
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2011-10-03, 09:02 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: The Favored
Bluh!
I am incredibly sorry everyone. I just moved a few days ago, and I still have no internet for my main computer (and no way to transfer files). However, tomorrow I will (hopefully) have either a way to connect my main computer to the internet, or will have a way to transfer files. Hopefully then an update will happen.
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2011-10-09, 11:03 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: The Favored
Hmmm... so far I like what I'm seeing. Some exposition will be necessary, but I suppose that will happen soon; the comic is still in its infancy. I think I'll keep an eye on this one. Good job!
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2011-10-12, 01:53 AM (ISO 8601)
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2011-10-12, 02:10 AM (ISO 8601)
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Re: The Favored
The newest page reminds me of Neon Genesis Evangelion with Shinji and Rei in the opening.
I love this comic.I make avatars. Send me a request.
Avatar by me.
BiTP:RCharacters
Let's Play: Video Games!
I suffer from major insomnia, don't be surprised if I'm on at odd hours.
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2011-10-12, 08:25 AM (ISO 8601)
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2011-10-13, 05:31 AM (ISO 8601)
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Re: The Favored
This comic is the best of the lot so far, there are several graphic tricks that are really noteworthy.
The Pen is mightier than the Sword - when the message is written in Blood.
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2011-10-14, 12:11 AM (ISO 8601)
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Re: The Favored
Thanks! But I shall remain mysteriously silent on any and all references that may appear to ...appear, in the comic (at least for now, unless there's some huge outcry or something.)
This one also took the longest to make, discounting moving/being sick time. However, on the plus side, things are starting to not look down, so updates might be more common in the future!
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2011-10-14, 06:05 AM (ISO 8601)
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2011-10-15, 02:26 AM (ISO 8601)
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Re: The Favored
I am happy that my mother ainīt like that. Nice comic.
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2011-10-21, 01:14 AM (ISO 8601)
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Re: The Favored
Thanks!
She (the Commander) does not seem to be displaying the most positive traits at the moment, no.
It also just occurred to me that I forgot to give the first 4 comics titles, and though part of me wants to leave them without titles, it would add an additional place to make references/tell a story/etc...
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2011-10-28, 05:41 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: The Favored
Just letting anyone know who might still be waiting for an update:
I seem to have, unfortunately, shuffled this project further back on my list of things to do, so I'm putting it in temporary hiatus. When I actually have the drive to do more, I'll update it, but I don't know when that will be. Sorry everyone.